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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)
#sources #air #pollutants #uk #summarise #information #features #comparisons #mins
As one can see
at
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 the chart,
this
 is about
air
 pollution
source
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sources
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causes
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 by transport, industry, households, and total
air
 pollutants
since
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from
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 1990 to 2005.
In
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From
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 1990 to 1993, the
pollutions
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pollution
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 from transportation and households
are
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was
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 similar amount. And it
stay
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stayed
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stilled
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still
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 until 2005. Meanwhile, the number of
pollutions
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pollution
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 from industry and total
of
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apply
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pollutions
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pollution
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 was rising
up
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.
Despite
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, it
keep
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 decreasing
since
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from
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1993 to 2005.
In addition
, the chart shows that
in
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from
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 1999 til 2002,
total
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the total
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 of
air
 pollutants was almost equal. Same as industry from 2002-2005 To
sumerise
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summarise
, the quantity of
air
pollutions
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pollution
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 that happened
from
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for
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several
severous
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severe
 reasons, was lower from every previous
years
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year
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollutions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • air pollutants
  • emissions
  • decrease
  • increase
  • stable
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • drop
  • significant
  • legislation
  • technological advancements
  • comparative analysis
  • contributors
  • households
  • transport
  • industry
  • regulation
  • pattern
  • anomaly
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