The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Write 150 words.

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015.

Write 150 words.
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The given bar chart provides information about comparisons among 5
countries
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of
number
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a number
the number
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of women
undergo
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undergoing
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a study in higher education throughout 35 years from 1980 to 2015. It can be clearly seen that
,
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apply
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only
Australia
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in Australia
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had more than half of
female
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the female
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population
pursued
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pursue
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their
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a
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career
to
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in
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higher education in 1980. The rest of the
countries
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such
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as
UK
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the UK
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,
USA
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the USA
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, and France had under 50
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percent
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per cent
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respectively around, 35
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percent
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per cent
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, 38
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percent
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per cent
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, and 49
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percent
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per cent
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. South
Korea
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being
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the lowest
for
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at
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about 15
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percent
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per cent
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. 35 years later, all
countries
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except South
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Korea
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Korea's
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percentage
move
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moved
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upward to 50
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percent
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per cent
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of
women
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the women
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population. UK and USA percentages are rising
up for
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by
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20
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percent
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per cent
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, France increasing
at
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by
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a tiny fraction, and Australia remained the same.
Although
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South
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Korea
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Korea's
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percentage
are
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is
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doubled up to 30
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percent
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per cent
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, it is not changing the fact that South
Korea
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has the lowest numbers among all
countries
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included.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, percent, korea with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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