The bar chart shows the proportion of people aged over 65 years old in Germany, Canada, and the UK over a period of 50 years.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of
population
in three Add an article
the population
countries
(Germany
, Canada, and the UK
) who aged over 65 years old over a period of 50 years.
Overall
, it can be seen from the graph that the percentage of population
aged 65 in the three Add an article
the population
countries
witnessed an increase and the numbers predicted
to still keep going up until 2030. Add a missing verb
are predicted
Germany
was the most country that had population
aged more than 65 from 1980 to 2000. Correct article usage
a population
Moreover
, it is predicted that Germany
will still be the vast majority in 2030.
In terms of Germany
, the country stood at 15% in 1980, whereas
the UK
, which was the second highest, stood at over 10% in the meantime. The numbers for these two countries
was keep
Change the verb form
kept
raising
until 2000 Correct your spelling
rising
where
Correct word choice
when
Germany
and the UK
accounted for having
20% and 15% Unnecessary verb
apply
in
the proportion of the Change preposition
of
population
, respectively. However
, Canada which was the least in 1980 experienced an increase and had the exact percentage (15%) as the UK
in 2000.
In 2030, the three countries
predicted
to still keep Add a missing verb
are predicted
raising
. Correct your spelling
rising
Germany
's population
of people aged over 65 is predicted to be 25%. Furthermore
, Canada is predicted for having
Change preposition
to have
two times
increase from 1980, surpassing the Replace the word
a twofold
UK
as the second highest who only predicted for having
Change preposition
to have
not over
Correct word choice
less
than
20% Change preposition
apply
percentages
in 2030.Fix the agreement mistake
percentage
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, countries, germany, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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