The bar chart shows the proportion of people aged over 65 years old in Germany, Canada, and the UK over a period of 50 years.

The bar chart shows the proportion of people aged over 65 years old in Germany,

Canada, and the UK over a period of 50 years.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of
population
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the population
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in three
countries
(
Germany
, Canada, and the
UK
) who aged over 65 years old over a period of 50 years.
Overall
, it can be seen from the graph that the percentage of
population
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the population
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aged 65 in the three
countries
witnessed an increase and the numbers
predicted
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are predicted
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to still keep going up until 2030.
Germany
was the most country that had
population
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a population
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aged more than 65 from 1980 to 2000.
Moreover
, it is predicted that
Germany
will still be the vast majority in 2030. In terms of
Germany
, the country stood at 15% in 1980,
whereas
the
UK
, which was the second highest, stood at over 10% in the meantime. The numbers for these two
countries
was keep
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raising
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until 2000
where
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Germany
and the
UK
accounted for
having
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20% and 15%
in
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the proportion of the
population
, respectively.
However
, Canada which was the least in 1980 experienced an increase and had the exact percentage (15%) as the
UK
in 2000. In 2030, the three
countries
predicted
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to still keep
raising
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.
Germany
's
population
of people aged over 65 is predicted to be 25%.
Furthermore
, Canada is predicted
for having
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two times
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increase from 1980, surpassing the
UK
as the second highest who only predicted
for having
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not over
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less
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than
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apply
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20%
percentages
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percentage
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in 2030.
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