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The two floor plans show the renovation of AAA Accountancy's main office. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given floor plans illustrate how AAA Accountancy’s primary
office
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 changed after the renovation.
Overall
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, it can be seen that many
office
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 rooms have been opened up to pave the way for centralizing
office
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 equipment.
Additionally
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, the reception has been upgraded to be more formal
while
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 the rooms on the right have been untouched. Looking at the
center
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centre
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 of
this
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office
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, where a significant development takes place, the processing, new customers offices to the north of the main
office
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 have been demolished to allow for setting up desk sections
as well as
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 fax and copier. On the opposite side, the storage room and payroll
office
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 have been replaced by
sofa
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a sofa
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 which never
have
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 before. Moving on to the left side of the
office
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, the accounts
office
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 has vanished to make way for a storage room with smaller acreage( diện tích )
whereas
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 the reception place has been expanded with a longer entrance and a tortuous front desk which recovered by new seat arrangements. To the right side of
this
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office
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, all lunch, meeting rooms, and the manager’s room just only have minor changes
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structure
Try to organize your essay more clearly by using paragraphs to separate different areas of discussion. This would make your description easier to follow and understand.
linking words
Consider using a wider range of linking words and phrases to better connect your ideas and enhance the flow of your essay. Expressions like “furthermore,” “in addition,” and “conversely” can add clarity to transitions and comparisons.
language
Incorporate more comparative language and structures when discussing the changes. Phrases like “compared to,” “whereas,” and “unlike” could bring out the differences more sharply between the pre-and post-renovation floor plans.
content
Effectively summarised the main changes after the renovation, showing a good understanding of the task.
detail
Used specific examples to describe changes, which added clarity and detail to the description.
overview
Good attempt at presenting an overview at the beginning, setting the scene for your subsequent descriptions.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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