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The provided line chart illustrates the percentage of average change in the cost compared with the previous month of three metals for one year in 2014. They are categorized as copper, nickel and zinc.

The provided line chart illustrates the percentage of average change in the cost compared with the previous month of three metals for one year in 2014. They are categorized as copper, nickel and zinc.
This
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 line graph depicts the total
price
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 of three distinctive metals (copper, nickel, and zinc) per month in 2014.
Overall
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, the
price
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 of nickel decreased dramatically
along with
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 copper during 2014,
while
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 zinc increased slightly throughout 2014. For starters, in January
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2014, we can see a two
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percent
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 change in the
price
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 of copper;
moreover
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,
this
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 amount changed and plummeted substantially until May. From May to June, it stayed stable;
however
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, it rose significantly in July and turned to
one
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percent
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 until September. After a slight plunge in December, it rocketed considerably, and it was roughly
one
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 and a half. Nickle
Price
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 had a dramatic fall from January until March, from six
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percent
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per cent
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 to
one
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percent
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. After a couple of months, which stayed stable, it again dropped rapidly in June.
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, in July, we can see a substantial soar. For three months, nothing changed in the
price
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 of Nickle.
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, from October to November, there was a sharp rocket in the
price
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 of
Nickle
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Nickel
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, which again turned to
one
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percent
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per cent
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 and
also
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, stayed
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one
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at one
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percent
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 until the end of 2014. At the beginning of 2014, the
price
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 of zinc had a
one
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percent
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 change compared to the previous month. After a went up in the
price
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 in June, we can see a sharp decline;
moreover
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, after that, it went up, and the changes were approximately zero
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percent
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 for three months. From October to November, it increased sharply and began to go up, and in December, the change was two
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percent
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, moreover".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price, percent, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rocketed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "substantially" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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