The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts illustrate how many bathing suits were sold from January to June in New York in 2012, and what was the average
temperature
during that period.
Overall
, the revenue from the sales increased until April and
than
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dramatically declined,
whereas
temperature
steadily increased, which means that there was
the
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correlation between those two parameters. April was the most successful month in terms of swimming suit sales, with almost 290 hundred thousand USD, which was around ten times more earnings compared to June and approximately three times more compared to January. The average
temperature
in January was around 30F, and from February it constantly increased until peaked at 65F in June. It is obvious, that people in New York in 2012 massively bought bathing suits until the
temperature
achieved its top at roughly 50 F in April, as
according to
the chart, above
this
temperature
the sales dropped
down
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dramatically, from 290 hundred thousand to around 170 hundred
thousands
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USD.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperatures
  • bathing suit sales
  • correlation
  • monthly breakdown
  • significant changes
  • warmest months
  • speculate
  • trends
  • increase in temperature
  • contrasting
  • predictive speculation
  • general trends
  • specific months
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