The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 word

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 word
The bar chart illustrates many changes in the proportion of
people
who were born either in
Australia
or outside
Australia
living in urban, rural and towns from 1995 to 2010.
Overall
, In both years,
people
who were born outside of
Australia
lived in
cities
which is the highest than rural areas and towns,
To begin
with, in 1995 most of the
people
who were born in
Australia
lived in
cities
which reached around 50%
while
, others were below 40%.
Additionally
,
people
who were born outside
Australia
were the same as
people
born in
Australia
60% in
cities
and 40% in rural areas and towns below 20%.
On the other hand
, in 2010 the highest number of
people
who were born in
Australia
inhabited
cities
around 65%
while
the remaining were below 20%.
However
, most
people
who were born outside
Australia
lived in
cities
80%
while
the remaining were below 20%.
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