The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph represents the way that

the

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foreign

travelers

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spent their money in England between 1980 to 2010

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the pie chart illustrates why they

visit

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there in 1980 and 2010.

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, there was a fluctuation in the foreign

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earned by the UK over the given three decades and the main reason for these visits was to

spent

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their vacations. Looking into details, received overseas money

was

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started

around

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8000 dollar

million

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and significantly

deceased

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decreased

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by 1000

million

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dollars within the same year,

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this

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there was a rapid increase in profits reaching a peak at 12000

million

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dollars in

the

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early 1995. There was a rapid decline in earnings in

the

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1993 falling closer to $9500

million

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before reaching

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$10500

millions

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in 2010. The top 3 purposes for these arrivals in

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2010 were spending holidays, business

works

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and meeting

friend

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friends

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and relatives and each of the percentages

are

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44.1, 20.7 and 18.7 respectively. But in 2010 visiting relatives was replaced by business reasons

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which

increase

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an increase

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was

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recorded

about

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10 % compared with 1980.

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Although

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vacation

visiting

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visits

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remained 1st

palce

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place

in 2010

its

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proportion decreased by 5 per cent.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "rapid" was used 2 times.

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4
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
25
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

195 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

line graph
steady increase
fluctuations
overseas visitors
significant rise
primary reasons
pie charts
holiday visits
business trips
visits to friends and relatives
expenditure
travel options
economic factors
tourism marketing strategies
global travel priorities
proportions
changing
correlate
reflect

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