The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in

1981, 1991 and 2001.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
The figures illustrate the amount of money which was spent by a
school
in
UK
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the UK
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annually in a
three decades
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three-decade
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period from 1981 to 2001.
Overall
, it can be seen that the biggest
shares
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share
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of
spenditure
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expenditure
of the
school
was
for
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on
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teachers's
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teachers'
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wages
while
the
Insurance
section
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sector
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had the lowest
shares
among other categories. First of all, in 1981 the highest amount of money which was spent by
school
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the school
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, was related
to
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on
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teachers
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teachers'
teacher's
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and staffs salaries, with 40% and 28% respectively and
these two
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this two section
these two sections
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section
had 68%
shares
of annual
spenditure
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expenditure
in total
while
insurance
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the insurance
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part with a minor
porportion
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proportion
, about 2% was the lowest.
Furthermore
, in 1991
salaries
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the salaries
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of
teachers
and
staffs
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staff
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was
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experienced a 4%
increament
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increase in
totally
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total
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where
teachers
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teachers'
teacher's
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wages went up about
one
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apply
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ten per cent.
However
, the
insurance
saw a minor growth
by
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of
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1%
in contrast
to
5
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a 5
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%
decreased
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decrease
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in total
shares
of other resources. Second of all, in 2001
while
wages
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the wages
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of
school
proffesors
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professors
had the biggest share in comparison to other parts with 5% less than half, the furniture and equipment
were
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experienced a dramatic rise and increased
less
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by less
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than a quarter , from 5% to 23% which took place of staffs salaries
shares
with only 15%.
Also
, the
insurance
section
got tripled in that year
in contrast
to
resources
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the resources
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section
where
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which
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it
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apply
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was about halved with 9% in total.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, shares, teachers, insurance, section with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Annual spending
  • Expenditure categories
  • Allocation
  • Trend analysis
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Budget allocation strategy
  • Inflation-adjusted
  • Future implications
  • Educational institutions
  • Technological resources
  • Maintenance and operations
  • Comparative analysis
  • Fiscal management
  • Resource allocation
  • Strategic planning
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