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The chart below gives information about the number of books rented in a British local library in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below gives information about the number of books rented in a British local library in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The supplied bar chart illustrates data about how many
books
 were rented in Malton town library that was totally local in 2009. A glance at the graph reveals that
,
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the most
number
 of
books
 were given
on
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 December and August,
While
 the minimum quantity was
on
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 February and March. In 2009,
at
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 the first six
month
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months
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 of
year
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the year
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,there was a moderate change and the
number
 of
books
 which was accessed in
second
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 month was 6
books
.(Which was the least
number
 in
whole
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of
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months
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).Only in two
months
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 the average of
preparing
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 was under 10 and three of them
was
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 just over 13
books
. For the second half of the year,the
number
 of
books
 fluctuated between July to
december
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December
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 in 2009.interestingly 20
books
was
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 provided
on
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 August and for the
last
 month,the average of renting was 21.(Which was the highest amount over the period.)
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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