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The charts below show that percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show that percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the ratio of
sodium
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, saturated fats and added
sugar
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 intake in usual American meals and
snacks
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 on average. An excessive amount of these nutrients may be harmful to our health.
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, the percentages of
sodium
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and
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saturated fat and added
sugar
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 are the highest
in
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at
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 dinner
while
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 added
sugar
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 is the most
dominent
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dominant
 in
snacks
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. The amount of
sodium
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 is observed to be the lowest in
snacks
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 and breakfast. In terms of dinner,
the
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sodium
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 consumption is the most prominent with it being almost half of the nutrients in the meal at 43%, and saturated fat is the second highest at 37%. For American lunch, the amount of
sodium
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 and saturated fat consumption is similar, in which they take up to 29% and 26% respectively.
Snacks
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also
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 play a crucial role in American health as the ratio of added
sugar
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 is the most prominent among the three actual meals and
snacks
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. The average percentage of added
sugar
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 in
snacks
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 is 42% whilst it consists of less than 20% in the other meals.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar, snacks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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