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Some teachers prefer the group study methods for their students while others prefer the individual learning method. Which one do you prefer? Discuss the benefits of group study and individual learning. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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about
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teacher
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teachers
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prefer
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who prefer
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 to teach study
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group
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them is better, but other
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teacher more
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teachers
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isssue
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issue
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benefits
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method
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have
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many
benefits
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students
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a
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homework to their children
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 have to work together. So they can
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 ideas with
other pupil
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clever and who
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knowladge
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knowledge
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teacher
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 of time
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teaching one by one their
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all
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, several
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teacher
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 believe that the individual learning
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 is a good
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choice
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teacher
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focus
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to teach
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just one
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students
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also
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confidence
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confidence
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my
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opinion,
i
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 prefer to teach with
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the teacher
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teacher
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use
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using
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individual
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method
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introvert
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also
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focus
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 am studying alone or with my
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students
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 was in middle school my
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prefer
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 learning
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group
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groups
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. Despite of
this
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teacher
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teachers
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learning
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 with individual
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 have some drowbacks like
students
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idean
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idea
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nervouse
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nervous
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teacher
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methods have
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benefits
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situasion
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situation
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such
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students
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learning
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method
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 because they can more focus. But
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depends
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they
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 class like usually. In conclusion, the issue about
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a good
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benefits
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circumstance
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learning
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more
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are
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structure
Make sure your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This structure helps your reader follow your argument more easily.
paragraphing
Use paragraphing to organize your thoughts better. One idea per paragraph with a clear topic sentence at the beginning can really improve readability.
linking
Connect your ideas smoothly using transitions and linking words like 'however,' 'for instance,' and 'in addition' to make your argument more coherent.
stance
Stick to either defending group study methods or individual learning methods throughout your essay to maintain a clear stance on the topic. Discussing the benefits of both somewhat dilutes your argument.
examples
Try to use more specific examples to support your points. Personal or observed experiences can greatly enhance your argument's impact.
grammar
Watch out for spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors. These can distract from your message and make it harder for the reader to understand your points.
understanding
You discussed both sides of the argument, which shows an understanding of the topic.
personal insight
Your essay provides a personal viewpoint, adding depth to your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • interaction
  • diverse perspectives
  • support system
  • teamwork
  • problem-solving skills
  • critical thinking
  • self-discipline
  • time management
  • autonomy
  • productive
  • efficient
  • focused
  • motivation
  • knowledge retention
  • adaptability
  • learning style
  • communication
  • expand horizons
  • peer feedback
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