Today more and more people want things instanly (e.g. goods, service, news) why is this? Is it positive or negative development?
In
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the modern
modern day
era Add a hyphen
modern-day
with
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apply
due to
technological advancements, a large of communities want a growing demand of
instant gratification about Change preposition
for
the
goods and Correct article usage
apply
good
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apply
service
. Fix the agreement mistake
services
This
writer frimly
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firmly
belive
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believe
this
is the
positive development since it can save so much effort and time as well Correct article usage
a
and
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as
increasing
the Wrong verb form
increase
opportuinity
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opportunity
of
employment for local Change preposition
for
people
.
It must be understood that the advant
of the internet, lots of Correct your spelling
advantage
people
can shorten their time to work in industry
zone because Correct article usage
an industry
worker
can easily do their work online and finish assignments at the click of a button with modern technology, or they can buy delicious foods online when they stay at Add an article
the worker
a worker
factory
without go Add an article
the factory
to
there to buy it. Remove the preposition
apply
For example
, shopping online has increased rapidly among many people
in recent times around the world, we can buy everything from the Internet online does not
the need to get out of our comfort zone.
Verb problem
without
Beside
that, when more individuals want to a multiple Replace the word
Besides
purpose
faster, they Change to a plural noun
purposes
also
create favorable
conditions for the number of shippers are Change the spelling
favourable
increased
and help society Wrong verb form
increase
reduces
the unemployment rate.
Correct subject-verb agreement
reduce
For example
, during the covid
epidemic, all Correct your spelling
COVID
people
have to stay at home and they cannot go out. when you want to buy your favorite
food, personal belongings or clothes, you can buy Change the spelling
favourite
online
and Correct pronoun usage
them online
shipper
delivers Correct article usage
the shipper
this goods
for you. Change the determiner
these goods
Therefore
, this
is the
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apply
convinience
for you in a hard life and Correct your spelling
convenient
make
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makes
yourself
less Correct pronoun usage
you
relax
.
Wrong verb form
relaxed
To sum up
, we are living a modern social life due to
technology having increased than ever before. While
it can be a positive development in that it makes life easier and more convenien
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convenient
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