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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Whether
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 social works have to be obligatory for
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adolescents
 or not is an essential issue of public debate.
Although
 these tasks bring about many advantages, I will argue that the idea of forcing youngsters to do community service for free is not beneficial for students
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 the
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society
. There is a widely held view among people that public services provide school children with the most constructive approach to their social life fundamentals and future careers. First and foremost, having a real job would lead to
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 better understanding of theoretical lessons. Practical experience is assumed to be a factor which
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juvenils
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juveniles
 to become more ready to
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 the challenges of each field of work.
In addition
, the subsequent factor might be the importance of social communication skills that are achievable through the situation in which the child directly is in touch with others.
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 early
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 they
are acquired
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 how to deal with humankind and their related problems. Unpaid community service,
on the other hand
, can not make a lasting impression on
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 ones since
this
 is a compulsory module. There are a number of justifications involved in
this
 statement. The chief one might be the lack of payment and rewarding features of being a worker. Money, by way
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an
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 vital role in boosting their
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 and recharging their batteries on account of the fact that earning a salary
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 self-esteem and productivity.
Moreover
, they have the opportunity to
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practice
practise
 financial
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management
 skills which
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 of utmost importance in
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adulthood.
Therefore
, not only does funding improve the
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practicality
 of the plan, but
also
 it results in finance.-related skills In conclusion, despite the favourable aspects of playing
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 in
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community service, I argued that charging high school
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 roots in the more efficient results
as well as
 partiality that they show to
this
 type of educational program.
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