The graphs below show the changes in the amount of confectionary export in Iran between 2005 and 2010.

The given visuals illustrate some changes in the number of confectionary productions in Iran in 2005 and 2010. The number of Danmarki production was the most with 45% in 2005 followed by

Baasloq

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with 35%

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this

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amount shifted to

Baasloq

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by one quarter and Keyk Yazdi with 25%. The number of confectionary exports in 2005 respectively was Danmarki, Basloaq and in 2010

Baasloq

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and Keyk Yazdi

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the amount of Keyk Yazdi decreased by 20% and keykYazdii increased to 15per cent more than in 2005.

Baasloq

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has changed by 355 to 45% from 2005 to 2010.

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the amount of muffin never changed and was the same in both years by 5%. All in all these items shifting was the fluctuation in

this

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years.

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May 13, 2024

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