The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
The process diagram below illustrates the steps and tools used to make
cement
, and how it
used
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to make concrete. At first glance at the process diagram, the two products need machines in order to be made. Another noticeable feature
,
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is, cement
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cement
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that cement
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go
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through many steps
such
as crashing, mixing, and heating. Interestingly, 50% of concrete's
ingrediants
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ingredients
are tiny stones.
To begin
with,
firstly
, limestone and clay are crashed;
as a result
, they turn into a powder form.
Next,
they go through a mixer, and
then
, the mixed powder
reach
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a rotating heater, and
then
it goes through a grinder.
Finally
, it becomes
cement
, and
then
they put it in bags.
Moreover
, to make concrete specific percentages of water,
cement
, gravel, and sand were mixed together in a machine. For
further
explanation, the percentage of water is the lowest one which equals 10%
while
gravel hit the highest amount because it exactly equals 50% which is
the
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half.
Also
, sand equals a quarter of the whole mixture
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • quarrying
  • crushing
  • mixing
  • grinding
  • kiln
  • clinker
  • gypsum
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • concrete
  • building materials
  • limestone
  • clay
  • fine powder
  • rotating
  • cooling
  • hydration
  • aggregate
  • compression
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