The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
The process diagram below illustrates the steps and tools used to make
cement
, and how it used
to make concrete.
At first glance at the process diagram, the two products need machines in order to be made. Another noticeable featureAdd a missing verb
is used
,
Add a missing verb
is, cement
cement
Correct determiner usage
that cement
go
through many steps Correct subject-verb agreement
goes
such
as crashing, mixing, and heating. Interestingly, 50% of concrete's ingrediants
are tiny stones.
Correct your spelling
ingredients
To begin
with, firstly
, limestone and clay are crashed; as a result
, they turn into a powder form. Next,
they go through a mixer, and then
, the mixed powder reach
a rotating heater, and Correct subject-verb agreement
reaches
then
it goes through a grinder. Finally
, it becomes cement
, and then
they put it in bags.
Moreover
, to make concrete specific percentages of water, cement
, gravel, and sand were mixed together in a machine. For further
explanation, the percentage of water is the lowest one which equals 10% while
gravel hit the highest amount because it exactly equals 50% which is the
half. Correct article usage
apply
Also
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