The maps below show one part of a small town called Springsby as it is now, and plans for how it might be developed

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The pictures provide information about the area, which is located in a small town

, is

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named Springsby

as well as

the

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information related to the present time,

also

in the

future

, which might be improved.

Overall

, the facilities will be added

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than now,

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the same time the empty spaces

are

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filled fully

according to

the

future

plan. Meanwhile, the

park

, school and housing estate, which

has

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already existed during the time,

are

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not replaced or changed. In

future

, two shopping centres are going to be built in that area so that the field will become more crowded,

consequently

, the plan involves a plethora of automobile parks compared to at the moment. Based on planning, the south shopping centre would

be covered

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more territory than the north shopping mall.

On the other hand

, the

park

has covered more fields than in the

future

In contrast

, the lake will be transformed to cover

from

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the planning feature.

Thus

, the car

park

, which is located in the lake

park

, would have the largest field rather than other

vehicles

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parks.

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