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ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
#ou #minutes #expenditure #three #categories #age #groups #residents #uk #summaries #information #features #comparisons
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information
informtion
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information
 on three
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different
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differents
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different
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 types of
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categories
catergories
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categories
between
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for
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a
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different
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different
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 group of
age
 which are populations who are living in The UK in
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2004
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different
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type
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types
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 of
catergoreis
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categories
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on
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the
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food and drinks and
entertianment
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entertainment
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age
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ages
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 61 to 75 and 76 up most
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people
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the people
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 are spending on
entertianment
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entertainment
 and drink. The group
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aged
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age
 under 60 are expenditure on
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and
hotel
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hotels
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,
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, Food and Drink and
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entertainment
 and
slighlty
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slightly
rising
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up
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whereas
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decrease
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in
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 76+.
On the other hand
, Restaurant and Hotel were highest in under 30 and lowest in 61 to 75 of
age
. From the
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beginning
begining
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beginning
 Food and Drink was lowest and it is extremely increasing between the
age
 of 31 to 76+, Despite that The
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highest
higest
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highest
 is Restuarant and Hotel is highest in
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those under
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 30, But was steadily
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 the
age
 31 to 60and lowest in the 61 to 75,
then
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age
 76+
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Entertainmentwas
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Entertainment was
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age
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ages
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 but
cdramatically
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dramatically
 highest
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 the
age
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ages
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 of 61 to 75 and decreased down on the
age
 76+
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • categories
  • age groups
  • residents
  • United Kingdom
  • steady increase
  • marked decrease
  • peak
  • age bracket
  • lower spending
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