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ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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different
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categories
catergories
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categories
between
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a
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different
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 group of
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2004
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types
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 of
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categories
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food and drinks and
entertianment
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entertainment
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ages
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 61 to 75 and 76 up most
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people
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the people
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 are spending on
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entertainment
 and drink. The group
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aged
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age
 under 60 are expenditure on
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and
hotel
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hotels
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,
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, Food and Drink and
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entertainment
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slightly
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whereas
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 76+.
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, Restaurant and Hotel were highest in under 30 and lowest in 61 to 75 of
age
. From the
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beginning
 Food and Drink was lowest and it is extremely increasing between the
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 is Restuarant and Hotel is highest in
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 30, But was steadily
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 the
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 31 to 60and lowest in the 61 to 75,
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Entertainmentwas
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Entertainment was
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age
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ages
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 of 61 to 75 and decreased down on the
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 76+
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • categories
  • age groups
  • residents
  • United Kingdom
  • steady increase
  • marked decrease
  • peak
  • age bracket
  • lower spending
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