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The charts below show rhe main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount Of support they receivedfrom employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below show rhe main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount Of support they receivedfrom employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The graphs below illustrate the 2 different reasons for which
students
 in various
age
 groups study, namely for career and for interest. It
also
 shows how much
support
 they gained from their employers for their education.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the highest number of
students
 are in the
age
group
 of less than 26
years
, and they contribute to the
group
 that receives most of the
support
 from their company. It is
also
 evident that most
number of
Correct quantifier usage
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students
 pursue education for their careers rather than for their interests. Meanwhile, as the
age
 progresses the amount of
support
 the office gives for their studies diminishes. Around 80% of
students
 below 26
years
 study to build a career, for which they are offered 60%
support
 from their company.
Although
 those in the
age
group
 between 26-29
years
 and 30-39
years
 make up the second and third highest categories of
students
 who prefer to study for their career with about 70% and 65% of people respectively, people over 49
years
 avail the third highest
support
 of about 45%,
while
 in those between 26-29
years
 get nearly 50%
support
. 70% of elderly people above 49
years
 continue their education for their interests rather than for their careers. The company offers the least
support
 to those between 30-39
years
. The interest to pursue studies for those between 40 and 49
years
 is almost equal for both categories, with 40% in each
group
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, age, support, group, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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