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The charts below show rhe main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount Of support they receivedfrom employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below show rhe main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount Of support they receivedfrom employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The graphs below illustrate the 2 different reasons for which
students
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 in various
age
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 groups study, namely for career and for interest. It
also
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 shows how much
support
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 they gained from their employers for their education.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the highest number of
students
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 are in the
age
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group
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 of less than 26
years
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, and they contribute to the
group
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 that receives most of the
support
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 from their company. It is
also
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 evident that most
number of
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students
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 pursue education for their careers rather than for their interests. Meanwhile, as the
age
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 progresses the amount of
support
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 the office gives for their studies diminishes. Around 80% of
students
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 below 26
years
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 study to build a career, for which they are offered 60%
support
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 from their company.
Although
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 those in the
age
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group
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 between 26-29
years
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 and 30-39
years
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 make up the second and third highest categories of
students
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 who prefer to study for their career with about 70% and 65% of people respectively, people over 49
years
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 avail the third highest
support
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 of about 45%,
while
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 in those between 26-29
years
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 get nearly 50%
support
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. 70% of elderly people above 49
years
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 continue their education for their interests rather than for their careers. The company offers the least
support
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 to those between 30-39
years
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. The interest to pursue studies for those between 40 and 49
years
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 is almost equal for both categories, with 40% in each
group
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, age, support, group, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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