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The maps below show the main changes which took place on the town of Seaton between 1950 and 2000

The maps below show the main changes which took place on the town of Seaton between 1950 and 2000
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These two diagrams detail the layout of the
town
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 in Seaton and the development between 1950 and 2000.
Overall
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, the most significant change was the area of the race course which
it
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is
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 close to the beach,
had
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which had
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 been replaced
to
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with
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 luxury apartments.
In addition
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, there was be build a new motorway across the
town
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. In 1950, one of the major features was that most of the houses were near the beach
such
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 as hotels and a train station.
in other words
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, most
area
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areas
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 on
this
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 map
was
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were
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 fields across the
town
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.
other
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another
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 element on
this
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 map was there
had
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was
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 a race course in the south of the
town
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.
On the other hand
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, there were several changes in
this
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town
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.
Firstly
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, in 1974, there was be built a new motorway across the
town
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.
Moreover
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, in 1964 there was be erect department store close to the highway.
furthermore
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, other important changes were between 1992 and 1998
which
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where
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 there was plant a new water park
close
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closed
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 existing hotels and
removal
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removed
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 race
course
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courses
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 to
changed
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be changed
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 to luxury
apartmets
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apartments
.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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