The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the sets of life stages of
salmon
and shows information about the three types of
salmon
.
Overall
, there are three main life
process
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, starting with
egg
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the egg
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and
end
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up with adult
salmon
. From the diagram, it can clearly be seen that
salmon
have two habitats to live which are
river
and sea.
Moreover
, the whole life cycle of
salmon
requires a minimum of almost 10 years to grow. In terms of the first habitat, the adult
salmon
laid their eggs around the reeds and under the stones in
upper
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river
for approximately 5-6 months. The
river
where the eggs
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were places
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places
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was a
slow moving
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river
.
Then
, once the
egss
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eggs
become fry salmons with the size of 3-8 cm, they will live in a
fast moving
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river
or lower
river
for around 4 years.
Furthermore
, the fry
turn
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into smolt salmons with a bigger size
for
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of
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about 12-15 cm and
migrate
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migrates
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to the open sea for around 5 years. There, they will grow into adult
salmon
and next back to the
river
to spawn.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, river with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • life cycle
  • species
  • freshwater
  • marine habitat
  • larvae
  • fry
  • smolts
  • spawn
  • anadromous
  • survival rates
  • migrate/migration
  • vulnerability
  • adaptation
  • maturation
  • environmental conditions
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