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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphics give statistics about
crime
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 in the United Kingdom
last
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 year. The line graph shows
link
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a link
the link
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 between
crime
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 and age and the pie chart gives a breakdown of four different crimes, as a percentage.
Overall
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, we can see that
majority
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the majority
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 of
crime
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 is committed by teenagers and people in their early twenties. The pie chart shows that violent
crime
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 is the most common type. Looking at the line graph,
it is clear that
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 teenagers and young adults were much
likely
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more likely
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 to be criminals than children or older people. At twelve years old the
crime
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 rate rocketed hitting a peak at 20 years with 800 000 crimes
were
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committed by people of
this
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 age.
However
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, the
crime
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 rate
then
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 fell significantly to
200 000
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200,000
 at 28 years and continued to drop with age. Nearly half of the
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crime
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crimes
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identify
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identified
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 in the pie chart
was
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were
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 related to
violent
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violence
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. With drug and property
crime
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 at just under
quarter
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a quarter
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 each. Public order
crime
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 is the lowest at just under ten
percent
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per cent
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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