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The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two plan views illustrate the school premises of Lynwich
college
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 in 2006 and today.
Overall
, new infrastructures have been built inside the
area
 to provide
better
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a better
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 studying environment for students. Other than that,
centralized
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a centralized
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 road network provide ease of access
into
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to
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 the various buildings which
lacks
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was lacking
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 in the past. Looking into details, new bus stops
has
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have
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 been constructed adjacent to the main road which occupy some land space of the school. The car park has been redesigned in
such
 a way that some
area
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areas
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has
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have
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 been allocated for bikes.
Moreover
,
centralized
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a centralized
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 cafeteria is standing to serve all the people inside to buy their necessities. It is interesting to note that,
although
the
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apply
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college buildings 1 and 2 are
sill
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still
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 there,
few
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a few
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 trees in South West
area
 of the land
has
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have
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 been cut
inorder
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in order
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 to shift the library to provide
acess
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access
 from both of the school buildings. Now there is a sports
center
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centre
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 erected in the
Northen
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northern
 part of the
area
, in between the
play ground
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playground
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 and the carpark to facilitate more pupils to engage in
sport
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sports
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 activities.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underwent significant changes
  • consisted of
  • large open space
  • utilized
  • relocated
  • limited facilities and amenities
  • wider range of facilities and amenities
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