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More money should be poured into teaching science rather than other subjects. Do you agree or disagree?

#money #science #subjects
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belive
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 that
goverenmints
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governments
government
 should spend more cash
in
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scince
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science
since
lictures
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pictures
lectures
instead
 of other materials, And I strongly agree for certain reasons.
Firstly
,
scince
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science
since
licture
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literature
requred
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requires
 more training teachers and
in
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other
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the other
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 hand more
advance
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lab
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labs
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 to do
experienments
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experience
.
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Science
 brings to our life things like
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the iphone
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iphone
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iPhone
,
computers
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 technologies,
more
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and more
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advaned
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advanced
transportations
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transportation
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 that can never be
exisited
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existed
 if not invented by
scintest
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scientists
scientist
. and I am not saying to neglect
teaching
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to teach
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 other subjects because
also
 we need to have
echics
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ethics
 and good behaving peoples. In conclusion, Science needs more cash to be able to teach and improve
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compared
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compered
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compared
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 to other
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materials
mateirals
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materials
 and we should do that
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