The relatively recent development of games on phones, computers, and TV consoles is extremely popular with people all over the world. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such electronic games?

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Gaming on screen has become a part of everyday life for many.

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essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of the increase in people involving themselves with online gaming. Playing matches and completing missions online are good forms of entertainment where gamers can accomplish targets together and complete targets,

this

promotes team spirit and communication skills.

For example

, participants playing Grand Theft Auto can team up and talk to each other

while

planning and stress burst Addictive

Anti social

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Conclusion

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Your introduction effectively sets the stage for discussing both advantages and disadvantages of electronic games.

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Linking words
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Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

81 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

cognitive functions
problem-solving skills
spatial awareness
multitasking
addiction
attention span
online multiplayer games
teamwork
communication skills
social isolation
economic impact
revenue
financial strain
stress relief
eye strain
poor posture
sedentary lifestyle

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