You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter ● describe the problem with the equipment ●explain how this problem is affecting your work ●say what you want the shop or company to do

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to complain about

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the destop

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destop

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desktop

comuter

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computer

that is

provided by your company for work

purpose

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purposes

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From

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Since

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a couple of weeks ago, the computer

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has been

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hanging frequently. Especially, when I am typing anything for a long, it just

stucks

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sticks

in between and the worst part is, it would not allow me to save any content,

thats

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that's

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why I have to type everything again.

Additionaly

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Additionally

, one thing that I have noticed is that whenever it hangs, a high volume of

fan

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the fan

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is coming from the CPU which is quite unusual.

Then

I have to shut down the entire system and restart it which is very time-consuming. Because of that, sometimes I can not accomplish my tasks within

allocated

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period. On top of that, yesterday the system was

stucked

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stacked

stuck

in the middle of my presentation with my boss which was highly

embarassing

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embarrassing

for me. As a solution, I would like to request you to replace my

destop

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desktop

computer with

the

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fully functioning one to ensure

the

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apply

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smoother operations. I hope that swift actions will be taken by

yourside

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your side

. Thank you for considering my request. Looking forward to your response. Thank you.

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sincerely, Margi Joshi

Submitted by margijoshi19 on Wed May 15 2024

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task achievement

Proofread your letter for spelling errors. For instance, 'destop' should be 'desktop' and 'stucks' should be 'gets stuck'.

coherence cohesion

Try to use varied vocabulary and sentence structures to make your letter more engaging. Currently, some of your sentences are repetitive.

task achievement

You clearly described the problem and its impact on your work, which helps in achieving the task response criterion.

coherence cohesion

Your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, which makes it easy to follow.

suitable writing tone

The tone of your letter is polite and formal, suitable for this kind of communication.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

198 words

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malfunctioning
error messages
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productivity
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