You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter ● describe the problem with the equipment ●explain how this problem is affecting your work ●say what you want the shop or company to do

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to complain about
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the destop
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destop
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desktop
comuter
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computer
that is
provided by your company for work
purpose
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.
From
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Since
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a couple of weeks ago, the computer
is
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has been
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hanging frequently. Especially, when I am typing anything for a long, it just
stucks
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sticks
in between and the worst part is, it would not allow me to save any content,
thats
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that's
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why I have to type everything again.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, one thing that I have noticed is that whenever it hangs, a high volume of
fan
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the fan
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is coming from the CPU which is quite unusual.
Then
I have to shut down the entire system and restart it which is very time-consuming. Because of that, sometimes I can not accomplish my tasks within
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period. On top of that, yesterday the system was
stucked
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stacked
stuck
in the middle of my presentation with my boss which was highly
embarassing
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embarrassing
for me. As a solution, I would like to request you to replace my
destop
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desktop
computer with
the
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fully functioning one to ensure
the
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smoother operations. I hope that swift actions will be taken by
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your side
. Thank you for considering my request. Looking forward to your response. Thank you.
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sincerely, Margi Joshi
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task achievement
Proofread your letter for spelling errors. For instance, 'destop' should be 'desktop' and 'stucks' should be 'gets stuck'.
coherence cohesion
Try to use varied vocabulary and sentence structures to make your letter more engaging. Currently, some of your sentences are repetitive.
task achievement
You clearly described the problem and its impact on your work, which helps in achieving the task response criterion.
coherence cohesion
Your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, which makes it easy to follow.
suitable writing tone
The tone of your letter is polite and formal, suitable for this kind of communication.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • malfunctioning
  • error messages
  • troubleshooting
  • productivity
  • affecting
  • equipment
  • brand
  • model
  • repair
  • replacement
  • refund
  • delays
  • critical
  • impacting
  • user manual
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