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The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six - art related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six - art related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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Contained in the illustration is information pertaining to the comparison between the gender of the pupils who enrolled in six university courses relating to the field of art during 2011. From an observational perspective, all courses witnessed a greater number of female participants, with the exception of Art and Design.
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, the biggest disparity between the two genders was seen in Philosophy. Looking at the graph in
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 detail, it can be observed that the majority of
women
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 and
men
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 took part in English language and literature with 250 and 225 respectively.
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, there were 225
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chose
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 Communication and Media Stud and the
men
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's figure was 25 students lower. The same pattern can be seen in Linguistics with nearly 250 females compared to almost 200 males. Moving onto the remaining subjects, 50
men
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 signed up for Philosophy
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women
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 were 3 times higher than
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.
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, approximately 90
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 and 115
women
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 joined the History and Archeology program.
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, there were more males than females enlisted for Art and Design, with 175 and 155 in the following order.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • gender distribution
  • imbalance
  • participation
  • trend
  • highlight
  • significant
  • relatively balanced
  • disparity
  • societal factors
  • career opportunities
  • art-related subjects
  • analyze
  • compare and contrast
  • determine
  • discuss
  • cultural influences
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