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The charts below show the propotions of british, students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the propotions of british, students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie charts provide information on: the percentage of British
student
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students
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 at
university
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universities
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 in England who there can speak other languages
in addition
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 to English between 2000 and 2010 .
Overall
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, there was an upward trend in
spanish
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Spanish
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 only in 2000
while
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, there was a downward trend in four proportions ( German only , French only , no other language ,
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and two
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 other languages ) in 2010 .
According to
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 the charts, the highest
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category
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 was in Spanish in the year 2000 which
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apply
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increased to 35 in 2010 .
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, both German only and two other languages had
a
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the
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 same
percant
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per cent
 reaching 10% in 2000 and 2010 . The
another
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other
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 language was reta grew 5 fold from 15% in 2000 to 20% in 2010 .
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, the no other language was
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 to 10 in 2010.
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, the French only had a
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 decline from 15% in 2000 to 10% in 2010 .

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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