The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The diagram depicts the life
cycle
Use synonyms
of
salmon
Use synonyms
, from
fry
Use synonyms
to smolt, and
then
Linking Words
to adult
salmon
Use synonyms
. It's a continuous process where the
salmon
Use synonyms
perpetuate their species through spawning. Beginning with the release of
salmon
Use synonyms
eggs into the slow-moving upper river near small stones and reeds, it takes approximately 5 to 6 months for the eggs to develop into
fry
Use synonyms
, the initial stage of the
cycle
Use synonyms
. During
this
Linking Words
stage, the
fry
Use synonyms
measure
Fix the agreement mistake
measures
show examples
around 3 to 8 cm in length. As they progress, the
fry
Use synonyms
move
Change the verb form
moves
show examples
to the fast-moving lower river. Within about 4 years, they transform into half-grown fish known as smolt, reaching a length of approximately 12 to 15 cm.
Following
Linking Words
this
Linking Words
stage, the smolt migrate to the ocean where they spend the next 5 years maturing into adult
salmon
Use synonyms
. At
this
Linking Words
point, the adult
salmon
Use synonyms
may be caught by fishermen, marking the conclusion of their life
cycle
Use synonyms
.
However
Linking Words
, those that continue to grow eventually reach a length of around 70 to 76 cm and begin their journey back to freshwater to spawn.
This
Linking Words
completes one
cycle
Use synonyms
of the
salmon
Use synonyms
's life span, from larvae to spawn, perpetuating the species in an ongoing natural process.
Submitted by praneeth2094 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cycle, salmon, fry with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • life cycle
  • species
  • freshwater
  • marine habitat
  • larvae
  • fry
  • smolts
  • spawn
  • anadromous
  • survival rates
  • migrate/migration
  • vulnerability
  • adaptation
  • maturation
  • environmental conditions
What to do next:
Look at other essays: