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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008
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The given table provides information on how many
students
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who graduate
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graduate
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graduated
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 and postgraduate in
UK
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the UK
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 who did not apply
full - time
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for full-time
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job
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jobs
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 did
after
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so after
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 leaving university in 2008.
Overall
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,
further
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 study was the most
students
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 for both genres,
while
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 voluntary work was the least. Meanwhile, there was
an
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a
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 significant increase in the quantity of
graduate
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students
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, which was higher than the
figure
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 for postgraduate
students
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. The
number
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 of
graduate
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students
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 in part-time work was 17,735, which was significantly higher than the
figure
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 for postgraduate
students
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.
While
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 the
number
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 of postgraduate
students
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 in voluntary was 345, which was
the
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apply
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lower than the
figure
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 for
graduate
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students
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. There was a remarkable increase
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further
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in further
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 study in the
number
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 of
graduate
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students
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, which was approximately 27,000 higher than the
figure
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 for postgraduate
students
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.
Besides
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, the
number
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 of
graduate
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students
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 in unemployment was 16,235, which was sixteen times higher than the
figure
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 for postgraduate
students
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, graduate, figure, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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