The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The two bar graphs illustrate the percentage of published
movie
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movies
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and the percentage of
cinema
ticket
sales
for a decade from 1996 to 2006 in a country. The two bar graphs are categorized into four movie genres (
drama
,
comedy
,
fantasy
, and
romance
).
Overall
, more
drama
and
comedy
movies
were published than the other two genres.
This
is aligned with the
number
of
cinema
ticket
sales
, as
drama
and
comedy
movies
were more
favored
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favoured
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. In 1996,
drama
movies
were the most published (just above 25%), followed by
comedy
(20%),
fantasy
(12%), and
romance
(6%)
movies
respectively.
While
drama
movies
were the most published, the
number
of
ticket
sales
showed a different situation. The highest
number
of
cinema
ticket
sales
was for
comedy
movies
at 20%, followed by
drama
movies
at just above 15% in the second position.
However
, the
ticket
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tickets
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for
fantasy
and
romance
movies
were sold in
very
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small
number
, below 5%.
Thus
, a huge gap of around 15% appeared. After a decade, in 2006, the
number
of
movies
published increased to around 5 - 10%, except
romance
movies
remained the same. The situation remained the same, with
drama
movies
still in
the
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first place (35%), followed respectively by
comedy
(25%),
fantasy
(16%), and
romance
(6%)
movies
.
Moreover
,
cinema
ticket
sales
also
slightly rose to nearly 5%, except
romance
movies
slightly declined
around
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3%.
Comedy
movies
were still the most popular at 23%
while
romance
movies
became the least popular at only 2%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words cinema, ticket, sales, drama, comedy, fantasy, romance, movies, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • depict
  • significant increases/decreases
  • highlighting
  • drawing comparisons
  • discrepancies
  • notable trends
  • unexpected findings
  • anomalies
  • phenomenon
  • emphasizing
  • evolution
  • implications
  • producers
  • distributors
  • audiences
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