One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is traffic on roads. Traffic on roads has become a problem in the world. It is undeniable that cars has become an essential part of our life.

One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
traffic
on roads.
Traffic
on roads has become a
problem
in the world. It is undeniable that cars
has
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become an essential part of our life.
However
, these days we have problems with
traffic
and the amount of cars in the world. One of the main aspects of the
problem
is that
traffic
pollutes the environment. Today we can see that in some countries there is polluted air. One of the main reasons behind
that is
that
traffic
produces a lot of harmful chemicals.
This
could lead to global warming or might result in acid
rains
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. To tackle
this
problem
people should add some new laws as in Asian countries.
For example
, we can see that in China, the government regulates
traffic
through a law that allows you to drive on certain days of the week. We can
also
see
this
law in Mongolia
an
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other Asian countries, where
this
law
nealy
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nearly
adopted.
This
may be the easiest and so the best way to reduce the
ammount
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amount
of
traffic
. Having weighed everything mentioned
up
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, we can come to
a
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conclusion that the government and society can reduce the
problem
with the amount of
traffic
at a
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level and at an individual level but it
take
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a lot of effort. So it would not be surprising to see some little changes in the near future. Actions must be taken urgently,
otherwise
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we will get problems
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global warming, polluted air,
acid
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and acid
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rains
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.
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task achievement
Elaborate on your main points with additional supporting details. For instance, when discussing pollution, you could mention specific chemicals cars emit and their effects.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that all parts of your essay are clearly connected. Use linking phrases like 'however', 'furthermore', and 'consequently' more effectively to guide the reader through your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Review your grammar and sentence structures to avoid minor errors. For example, 'cars has become' should be 'cars have become'.
task achievement
The introduction sets a clear context for the essay, outlining the prevalence of traffic issues globally.
task achievement
You provide a practical example of traffic regulation from Asian countries, adding depth to your argument.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and emphasizes the urgency of the problem, leaving a strong final impression.

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