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Main reasons for students choosing a particular UK university between 1987 and 2007

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The pie charts compares main reasons for particular UK university that students choose in 1987 and 2007
overall
,
it is clear that
 students chose suitable degree courses more than quality of resources and close to parental less than others but in the next
one
 there are some differences suitable resources are almost same but good sports and social activities
subsequently
 decreased and close to parental home rose in the next
one
 in 1987, good sports and social activities was 19% but in 2007 it declined only 6% afterward, suitable degree courses was 35% with a small change in 2007 to 37% and close to parental home was only at 10% in 1987 but it rose up to 22% and quality of teaching with a small increase from 15% up to 18% in 1987 and 2007, respectively,
then
 the
last
one
 is good sports and the
last
one
 is quality of resources with a small change from 21% to 17% in 1987 and 2007, respectively.
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The essay compares the main reasons for students choosing a particular UK university between 1987 and 2007, covering the changes over time.
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