The bar chart shows the percentages of the UK workforce in five major industries in 1841 and 2011. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart shows the percentages of the UK workforce in five major industries in 1841 and 2011.

Write at least 150 words.
The bar chart compares the percentage of
labors
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labourers
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by
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in
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five different industries in the UK between 1841 and 2011.
Overall
,
while
most people, who lived in the UK, were interested in working in
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manufacturing
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manufactures
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manufacturing
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in 1841, services industries had by far the greatest percentage of
labor
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labour
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force among all in the next one hundred and seventy years. What stands out is that services, which were the second
popular
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workplace in the mid ninetieth century, became the most popular industry in the United Kingdom with a sharp growth from 33% in 1841 to 81% in 2011.
By contrast
,
it is clear that
manufacturing took the second place
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a 27% decrease in
term
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of the workforce.
On the other hand
,
although
third
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the third
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proportion of workers
were
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allocated to agriculture/fishing companies in 1841, they have lost their fame since the early 21st century and reached the percentage of energy/water industry in the same year, both with just one
percent
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per cent
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.
However
, construction experienced a negligible rise to 8%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • deindustrialization
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