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The best way to increase road safety is to make car drivers retake their driving test every year. Do you agree or disagree?

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An idea states that the best way an enhancement in the
safety
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 of the
roads
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 can become beneficial is
doing
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 a retake of the
driver
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's previous driving tests. I do not think
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 solution can solve any of the current problems regarding
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road
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safety
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 and I will discuss my opinion
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more
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. In my point of view, there is no doubt that
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safety
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 depends on multiple situations and can be viewed from various aspects. I state that test retakes cannot indicate the
driver
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's focus and ability to drive appropriately. One of my reasons is
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 because the driving examination has been done once before and the
driver
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 has been stated as suitable for driving in the criteria. So, the first action in the same mentioned category that can be more
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 is planting multiple security cameras and
speed-checker
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 in various parts of each
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 another option
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 crucial my opinion in order to make sure a
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 is safe enough is repetitive and organized checks by the police throughout each month to ensure that the concrete and the
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 ground are smooth and there is no anomaly on the
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 that can cause any incidence as well.
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,
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 cannot be defined as preventing accidents from happening on the
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. As it has been mentioned on the news from time to time,
roads
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 can become very good hiding spots for criminals and even serial killers.
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,
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, especially in specific parts and regions that are accounted as
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 attractions can become dangerous places for hitch-hikers and
solo-travelers
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. So putting up a plan to ensure
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safety
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 for these individuals should be as important as the other mentioned subjects.
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, when thinking about required
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 improvements on
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, we should not limit our options either
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 the typical form of the car accident or the professionalism any
driver
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 might lack. There are many different ways to address
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 a vast subject and the issues connected to it.

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task achievement
Your essay effectively addresses several important factors related to road safety, which shows a clear understanding of the topic. However, to more fully answer the prompt, consider discussing the potential benefits and drawbacks of retaking the driving test specifically, in addition to your other valid points.
coherence cohesion
Work on the structuring of your paragraphs to ensure each one clearly addresses a single main idea. This will help improve the logical flow of your essay.
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Ensure you provide specific examples and more detailed evidence to back up your points. This will help strengthen your argument and make your essay more persuasive.
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You effectively highlight multiple aspects of road safety, such as criminal activity and road conditions, showing a broad understanding of the topic.
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Your essay shows clear opinions and ideas, and it addresses a range of issues related to road safety.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present and effectively frame your discussion, showing a good understanding of essay structure.
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