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The maps below show the city layout of Brisbane between 1975 and the current day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the city layout of Brisbane between 1975 and the current day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the maps show
that
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the
city
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 layout of Brisbane in 1975 and today.
in
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 2002 the shopping
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center
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centre
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is
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was
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 on top of the
city
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center
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centre
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 and it's still there in the same spot today,
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However
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 we can see that the factory
in
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is
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 not here anymore, it's was in the right of the
city
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center
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centre
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, But today its ching it's now a software company, About the old cinema it's
also
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 gone,
its
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it's
it is
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 now a pub it's dawn the
city
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center
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centre
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, in on top the
sopping
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shopping
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center
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centre
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 on the left there is a new
aparments
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apartment
apartments
, it
wasint
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wasn't
 there before in 2002,
waht
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what
also
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 new is below the pub
thay
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they
 build a huge football stadium, And the build a new train station on the left of the
city
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center
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centre
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, center with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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