There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do

Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing
this
letter regarding
few
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issues with the local
bus
service of
york
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region
from
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for
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last
two weeks. The main problem with
the
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bus
number 20 is its reliability, which is not in good standing.
This
is because of
frequents
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delays during mornings and evenings. Not only
this
, but the cleanliness of the
bus
is not well maintained. I mean the seats are dirty and
smells
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really bad ,
specially
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at the back. I commute regularly to my workplace, which is 30 minutes away from my house.
Due to
buses
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irregularity,
i
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have been reaching
to
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my workplace 10 minutes late from
last
few days.
This
is effective
my
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attendance at my job.
Also
, it is difficult to sit on those stained seats and one can get
infection
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or
can
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be sick. I would like the company to inspect the
bus
,
ensure
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and ensure
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it is clean and safe for passengers. The system should start a new service
also
till the old
bus
comes back on the road. Regular
maintanence
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maintenance
and checks should be done to ensure public health and safety
is
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in safe hands. Look forward
for
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the good change. Sincerely, Manpreet Kaur
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task achievement
Clarify the problem with bus number 20 more explicitly, mentioning specific examples if possible.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea more distinctly for better flow and comprehension.
coherence cohesion
Appropriate greeting and sign-off are used, creating a polite tone throughout the letter.
task achievement
Clear articulation of how the problem is affecting you personally, demonstrating a thorough understanding of the task.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adhering to schedules
  • inconvenience
  • daily routine
  • punctuality
  • frequency during peak hours
  • overcrowding
  • commuters
  • update system
  • reliable
  • maintenance
  • breakdowns
  • irregular bus timings
  • passengers
  • delays
  • unreliable
  • appointments
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