The chart illustrates the comparison of various types of energy generation in France namely coal, gas, petro, nuclear and the other energy over the period of 10 years starting in 1995.

The chart illustrates the comparison of various types of energy generation in France namely coal, gas, petro, nuclear and the other energy over the period of 10 years starting in 1995.
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information about the percentage of
energy
production
from five different
sources
(coal,
gas
,
petrol
, nuclear and
the
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other
energy
) in France between 1995 and 2005.
Overall
, in both years,
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Coal was the largest
resources
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of
energy
production
.
Gas
and
petrol
followed as the second and third largest
sources
, respectively.
In contrast
, nuclear and other
energy
sources
contributed a smaller portion of
energy
production
during
this
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, in 1995, coal,
gas
, and
petrol
accounted for approximately 30% of
production
each, with specific percentages being 29.80%, 29.63% and 29.27%, respectively.
Additionally
, nuclear
energy
contributed 6.40%,
while
other
energy
sources
produced 4.90%. By 2005, the percentage of
energy
produced from coal and
gas
had slightly increased to 30.93% and 30.31%, respectively.
However
, the proportion of
energy
derived from
petrol
had decreased significantly to 19.55%.
On the other hand
, the shares of nuclear and other
sources
rose to 10.10% and 9.10%, respectively.
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