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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the "Minfeatures, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the "Minfeatures, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The graph illustrates the amount of elderly
people
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 of ages 65 and above living in 3 countries, namely
Japan
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,
Sweden
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 and
USA
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 between 1940 and 2040.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 despite the increase in the number of old aged
people
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 in all 3 countries as compared to the past,
USA
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 will have the highest number in the future. In 1940's,
although
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 elderly
people
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 only contributed to around 10% of the total population of
Japan
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, it was the country on top of the list followed by
Sweden
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 and
USA
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 with only around 7% and 5% of old
people
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 respectively. From 1940 to 1980, both
Japan
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 and
Sweden
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 saw a steady rise in the number of elderly
people
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 to about 15% in both countries.
On the contrary
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, the levels in
USA
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 dropped below 5% after 1940 and remained stable till 1980. Just Before 2008
Sweden
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 overtook
Japan
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 as 20% of its population consisted of elderly
people
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 till the year 2018,
whereas
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 the numbers in
Japan
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 were just below15% till the year 2020. The numbers in
Sweden
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 fluctuated after 1980.
USA
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,
on the other hand
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 faced a gradual increase post 1980 and the levels reached 10%
at the end
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 of 2020.
Although
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USA
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 had the least population of those above 65 years from the beginning, in future it is expected to be on the top with 25% of elderly
people
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, followed by
Sweden
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 and
Japan
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 with 25% and 23% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, japan, sweden, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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