The Following chart show five different industries percentage share of France's economy in 2000, 2010 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relvant.

The Following chart show five different industries percentage share of France's economy in 2000, 2010 and 2020. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relvant.
The bar chart illustrates the contribution of five different industry sectors (Finance, Food Processing, Manufacturing, Tourism, Oil, coal and gas) to France's economy over three decades.
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, It can be seen that the finance industry has been the largest contributor
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over the other four industries and it is forecasted that it will remain one by the end of the year 2029. The finance sector was at its peak in 2009 at 30% followed by
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and Oil, coal and gas sectors contributed equally to the economy at around 25%. Manufacturing was
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the lowest was Food processing which accounted for 10%.
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, Manufacturing was the lowest earning industry
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for 5%.
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