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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Contained in the pie chart and line graph is information pertaining to the UK's
crime
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 information
last
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 year.
Overall
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, it can be seen that people aged 12 and 18 committed the most criminal activities compared to others.
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,
crime
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 related to violence was the dominant type of
crime
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 in the UK
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 the opposite was seen in public order
crime
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. Beginning with the chart, it can be observed that the 0-8 age group committed no
crime
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. The
crime
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 rate increased by 5% among people aged 12 before seeing a surge to 80% and reached its peak by 12-to-20-year-old individuals. After an increasing trend, the criminal rate
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 witnessed a drop to exactly 20% for people aged 20-28.
This
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 was followed by a slight decrease to around 5% and 20% by 20-60-year-old persons. The 64 age group had no data for
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. Turning to the type of
crime
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, violent
crime
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 dominated with 46%, below that was property
crime
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 and drug
crime
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 with 23% and 22%, respectively. With regards to public order
crime
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, it is the least type of
crime
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 accounting for just 9%
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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