One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that Governments impose extra taxes on flights to restrict tourism industry. It is undeniable that tourism has become an essential part of our life.

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that Governments impose extra
taxes
on flights to restrict
tourism
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the tourism
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industry. It is undeniable that
tourism
has become an essential part of our life.
However
, these days
tourism
creates a variety of problems,
such
as
pollution
due to
flights, transport and polluted water. One of the main aspects of the problem is
that
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apply
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tourism
.
For example
, many
couries
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countries
courses
like Thailand, Turkey, Maldives and others
depends
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on the steady earning from
tourism
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the tourism
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sector. If
government
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the government
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impose extra
taxes
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for
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these
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this
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these
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countries it could be catastrophic. One of the main reasons behind
that is
flights and
transports
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transport
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uses
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use
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and
produces
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produce
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a lot of chemicals and acids.
This
could lead to polluted water and
environment
or might result in acid rains. To tackle
this
problem government
need
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to control
pollution
and use workers to clean
environment
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. Some of the hotels and tourist
guiders
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guides
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need to
instructing
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visitors not to pollute the
environment
.
Moreover
,
scientist
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scientists
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and
engineers
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engineers,
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today
develop
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and created a lot of technologies that can help reduce
eñvironment
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environmental
pollution
.
This
may be the best way to control
pollution
created by tourists. Having weighed everything mentioned
up
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, we can come to
conclusion
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the conclusion
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that
tourism
creates a variety of problems for
environment
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the environment
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but
government
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the government
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need to find better solutions
instead
of
impose
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imposing
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extra
taxes
. So it would not be surprising to see some problems in
tourism
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the tourism
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sphere in the near future. Actions must be taken urgently,
otherwise
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otherwise,
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we will
get
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pay extra
taxes
and
polluted
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a polluted
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environment
.
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task achievement
Your essay addresses the topic and discusses both the negative impacts of tourism and potential solutions. However, ensure that each point is clearly linked to the argument you're making. For example, while mentioning that countries depend on tourism revenues, clarify how extra taxes could impact this dependency more explicitly.
coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the logical flow of your essay. For instance, start with a clear introduction of the issue, followed by a detailed discussion of problems caused by tourism, and then solutions. Using clear linking phrases can help improve the coherence.
task achievement
Your essay should support each main point with relevant and specific examples. Instead of stating that tourism pollutes, provide statistics or concrete examples. Also, ensure your arguments are backed by evidence or logical reasoning.
task achievement
Your introduction effectively sets the context by stating the growing importance of tourism and its related issues. This provides a solid foundation for the rest of the essay.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion summarizes your argument well, reiterating the need for government action without imposing extra taxes. This provides a clear closing point for your essay.
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