The bar chart shows the percentage of people in the United Kingdom per age group without any qualifications.

The bar chart shows the percentage of people in the United Kingdom per age group without any qualifications.
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bar chart shows the
percentage
of
the
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people in the United Kingdom per
age
group
without any qualifications. as we can see
that
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apply
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the
percentage
of
the
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apply
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people per
age
between
man
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men
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and
woman
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women
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are
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almost the same amount. between the
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ages
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age
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ages
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17-19 the
man
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men
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and the
woman
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women
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almost the same, But the
man
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male
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group
is higher
then
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than
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woman
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women
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group
by almost 1 or 2
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per cent
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percentage
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per cent
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,
Also
the same thing between the
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ages
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age
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ages
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20-24
its
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it's
it is
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still the
man
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male
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percentage
higher
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than
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then
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than
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womans
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women
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, And is the
age
of 25-29
man
and
woman
are the same
percentage
per
group
,
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it's
it is
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like 7 or 8
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, the same
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thing
for the
group
of the
age
30-39 they are the same
percentage
, the
diffrent
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different
start from the
age
of 40-49
its
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it's
it is
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way
more
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higher
then
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than
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all the smaller groups, its 10% for
man
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woman
its 1
percentage
higher
then
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man
, in the
age
of 50-59/64
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the highest
percentage
for
mans
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man's
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groups its almost 17% and for
woman
its
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20%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, age, group, man, woman with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 9 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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