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The bar chart shows the percentage of people in the United Kingdom per age group without any qualifications.

The bar chart shows the percentage of people in the United Kingdom per age group without any qualifications.
#bar #percentage #people #kingdom #age #group #qualifications
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, age, group, man, woman with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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