the chart below shows the different types of goods and services purchased online in Australia, Canada and the United Kingdom last year.
The bar graph below illustrates the rate of shopping online for various kinds of products and services in three different nations (
Australia
, Canada
and the UK
) in the last
12 months. In general, It can be clearly observed that the most purchased items on cyber and the net were in the United Kingdom. In addition
, relatively Australia
was In the middle position
, followed by Canada
in the lowest position
in purchasing online.
To begin
with, the United Kingdom was the most dominant in almost all purchasing items including music, books, computer appliances, DVD videos, and food and beverages with several exceptions. For example
, the ratio of music was around 60% while
In Australia
and Canada
were approximately 38% and 35% respectively. In contrast
, financial service has a deviation trend in which it was the least purchased item in the UK
. The data shown in the chart is around 2%, 15% in Canada
, and 18% in Australia
.
Moreover
, Australia
generally was in the 2nd position
in buying online items. For instance
, food and drink was less than 20%, while
the top position
in the United Kingdom was roughly 22% and In the bottom position
was Canada
which was about 1%. However
Australia
was leading in buying services of funding, in contrast
it was the least consuming in computers and toys, take a look at the evidence in toys, it was less than 5 % compared to the UK
and Canada
which almost reached 20%.
Finally
, Canada
frankly was in the 3rd position
in shopping online. For example
, DVD videos were less than 15%, while
both in the UK
and Australia
were around 39% and 20% turn. But, this
figure never gets chosen in
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