The given line graph illustrates the employment patterns in the USA between 1930 and 2010.
The given line graph illustrates the employment patterns in the USA between 1930 and 2010.
In 1930,about 75% of the labour force in the USA was employed in fishing,farming and foresting
while
only 10% worked in sales and office.At the same time
both the industrial and the technical sectors constituted just 2% of the workforce each.Add a comma
time,
This
situation changed only gradually over the next 20-30 years except for the Industrial and the
technical labour force,which increased more than threefold.
Correct article usage
apply
However
by 1980, there had been Add a comma
However,
a significant changes
.Correct the article-noun agreement
significant changes
a significant change
While
the farming,fishing and foresting employees experienced a decline in number to 40% of the workforce,Industrial and Technical employees witnessed a growth about
10% and 15%.
Change preposition
of about
Overall
,over the period of time between 1930 and 2010,the most dramatic changes could be seen by 2000,when the percentages of fishing,farming and foresting had a
Correct article usage
apply
decrease
in number to 10% Wrong verb form
decreased
while
the three other sectors had moved upward about
20% .Change preposition
by about
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