The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
"The diagram gives data on the process in which instant
noodles
are manufactured.
Use synonyms
Overall
, Linking Words
it is clear that
there is a total of 8 main stages, starting with flour and ending with labelled instant Linking Words
noodles
which are ready for Use synonyms
markets
.
In detail, flour Fix the agreement mistake
market
which
is stored in storage silos Correct pronoun usage
apply
are
fed to a mixer to be mixed with water and oil before being transported through rollers to become dough sheets. The mixture is Change the verb form
is
then
sent to be cut into dough strips. After that, the dough is fed into another machine to make Linking Words
Use synonyms
noodles
discs which are ready for the next step.
At the following stage, the Fix the agreement mistake
noodle
Use synonyms
noodles
discs are cooked Fix the agreement mistake
noodle
by
oil before being Change preposition
in
let
to Correct your spelling
left
dried
. Change the form of the verb
dry
Subsequently
, dried Linking Words
Use synonyms
noodles
discs are put in paper cups with vegetables and spices. Those cups Fix the agreement mistake
noodle
are
Change the verb form
then go
then
go through the next process called labelling and sealing. Linking Words
Finally
, labelled instant noodle cups are now ready for consumption."Linking Words
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