The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
"The diagram gives data on the process in which instant
noodles
are manufactured.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there is a total of 8 main stages, starting with flour and ending with labelled instant
noodles
which are ready for
markets
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. In detail, flour
which
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apply
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is stored in storage silos
are
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fed to a mixer to be mixed with water and oil before being transported through rollers to become dough sheets. The mixture is
then
sent to be cut into dough strips. After that, the dough is fed into another machine to make
noodles
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noodle
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discs which are ready for the next step. At the following stage, the
noodles
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noodle
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discs are cooked
by
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in
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oil before being
let
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left
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to
dried
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.
Subsequently
, dried
noodles
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noodle
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discs are put in paper cups with vegetables and spices. Those cups
are
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then go
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then
go through the next process called labelling and sealing.
Finally
, labelled instant noodle cups are now ready for consumption."
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words noodles with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing process
  • Noodle dough
  • Steaming
  • Cutting
  • Dough sheeting
  • Molding
  • Air-drying
  • Frying
  • Seasoning
  • Quality control
  • Packaging
  • Shelf life
  • Flavoring agents
  • Texture
  • Instant meal
  • Convenience food
  • Production line
  • Consumer
  • Ingredient mixing
  • Safety standards
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