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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
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The diagram given provides data about the rate of Australian
exports
 with four countries namely Japan,
US
Correct article usage
the US
show examples
,
China
,
India
Correct word choice
and India
show examples
 between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
, it can be seen that the proportion of
China
 rapidly changed and
rocket
Wrong verb form
rocketed
show examples
 to
like
Verb problem
apply
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27% between given times.
Firstly
, the rate of the USA was
unstabile
Correct your spelling
unstable
 in the given period. It is observed that commercial activity between these countries picked in 2000 like 12%. In 2012,
China
was
Verb problem
had
show examples
 the highest
exports
Change the noun form
export
show examples
 percentages by
a
Change the article
an
show examples
increadible
Correct your spelling
incredible
 change which is almost 30% from 1990.
Moreover
, the rate of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
exports
 for
China
 and
India
 was
exacly
Correct your spelling
exactly
same
Correct article usage
the same
show examples
 at the start but
China
 increased
33
Change preposition
by 33
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%
whereas
India
 went to 5%
at the end
. Unlike others, the percentages of
India
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 almost
stabile
Correct your spelling
stable
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 until 2000 ,
however
,
this
 was followed by
fluactiation
Correct your spelling
fluctuation
fluctuations
.
To sum up
, the given information shows that there is no balance between
exports
Fix the agreement mistake
export
show examples
 activity between given times and countries.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, china, india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • percentage
  • fluctuate
  • steady increase/decrease
  • notable rise/drop
  • peak
  • trough
  • comparative analysis
  • export destinations
  • trade relations
  • upsurge
  • downturn
  • economic ties
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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