The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.
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the percentage
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of both males and females who passed their driving
test
in one Asian country over the course of 30 years.
Overall
, between 1980 and 2010, the
percentage
of women who succeeded in the
test
dominated the
percentage
of men in general.
Nevertheless
, in 2000, the
percentage
of females reached its vertex, compared to other years,
whereas
the highest peak for males was in 2000 and 2010.
To begin
with, in 2000 the
percentage
of women who passed their driving
test
hit its climax at just
beneath
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70. Following
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in 2010 it reduced to approximately 64. Meanwhile, in 2000 and 2010, the
percentage
of males who succeeded in their
test
attained the highest
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them
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point
of
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just below 50.
On the other hand
, in previous years both genders had
relatively
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low rate of those who passed the
test
. In 1980, women had about 48
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,
while
the next year it rose to just above 50.
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at the start of the first
year
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year,
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the
percentage
of men accounted for about 29 respectively,
then
it climbed to 39
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