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The graph gives information about coffee production in 4 different countries from 1990 to 2010.

The graph gives information about coffee production in 4 different countries from 1990 to 2010.
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The bar graph demonstrates the
production
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 of
coffee
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 in four different countries which are (
Brazil
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,Colombia,Indonesia and Vietnam) in the period of 1990 to 2010.
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,
Brazil
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 outnumber the other three countries in
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coffee
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production
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 over the whole period.
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, Vietnam had the lowest
coffee
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production
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.
Brazil
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 had a rise over the whole period and it reached
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2 Million Tonnes in 2010.
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, Colombia reached
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 maximum
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 in 1990 where it reached to around 0.6 Million Tonnes of
coffee
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.
Brazil
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 kept increasing over the years but Colombia had Fluctuations but
still
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 the second
higher
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coffee
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production
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 country after
Brazil
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.
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, Vietnam had a gradual increase over the years.
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, Indonesia
was
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maintained
with
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the same
production
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 between the years 1990 and 1995 and
then
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 it rose
afterward
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. both countries reached a surge in the year 2010.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, coffee, brazil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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