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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
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The pie charts substantiate the proportion of allocating to different goods and services of households in two different countries, namely
Japan
 and
Malaysia
 over
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 course of a year. In conclusion,
it is clear that
Malaysia
 and
Japan
, which countries spent the largest consumption on housing and food, meanwhile healthcare hit the lowest. Consuming housing in
malaysia
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Malaysia
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, which was higher than
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in japan
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japan
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Japan
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, at 34%, meanwhile japanese approximately just 21% of their expenditure. In terms of food, the amount for both countries
were
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 relatively similar, at 24% and 27% for
malaysia
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Malaysia
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 and
japan
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Japan
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 correspondingly. The proportion of transport in 2010 accounts for a fifth of the total proportion in
japan
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Japan
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, which
twice
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 as much as the figure in
Malaysia
 just
at
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apply
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10%.Meanwhile, healthcare and other goods and services in
Malaysia
 only accomplish 26% and 3%
in contrast
Japan
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to Japan
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when
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which
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 reach 29% and 6%. That showed in 2010, other goods and services were the highest
conversely
 healthcare.
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